G321: Feedback on Storyboard and Script

When we had completed our storyboard and script, we presented our ideas to another group to see what their thoughts were on our ideas. We received a mix of both positive and negative feedback to help us improve our opening and make it the best it can be.

Storyboard:


Positive Feedback:

• The titles are interesting and creative and the order of the titles is good and not distracting.
• The idea of the voice over is good because it fits our choice of genre - very 'Bridget Jones' or 'Sex and the City'.
• The narrative relates to other romantic comedies.
• The comedy element is clear in the mood change at the end of the opening with the mobile phone ringing.
• The fact that the characters identity is hidden somewhat in the opening makes the audience ask questions and adds interest to the opening and what will happen next in the film. 

Negative Feedback:

• Maybe too similar to 'Sex and the City' and other existing rom-com's, perhaps needs more originality?
• Some argued that the mood change at the end doesn't fit and that it changes the consistency of the opening, distracting the audience.

Script:

Positive Feedback:

• Shows the genre clearly, talking directly about love with the comedy element when jumps and swears.
• Hints to her job because it sounds like an article for a magazine.
• Realistic, sounds like someones real thoughts and ideas.
• It makes you ask questions about what will happen later as t doesn' give away the plot and makes you want to keep watching.

Negative Feedback:

• The script is too romantically focused rather than the comedy side of the genre.
• Could perhaps come across as being quite cheesy and unrealistic?
• A good actress would be needed to make it more effective because it could sound odd.

By recieving feedback for our storyboard and script, we are able to improve upon our ideas for our opening to make it more effective and realistic.

Cath, Charley, Joanna